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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
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The diagrams below illustrate the proportion of the
water
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 used for residential, industry and agriculture in
San
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Diego
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,
California
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 and other parts of the world.
It is clear that
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 the largest percentage of using
water
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 belongs to homes in
San
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Diego
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 and
California
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.
By contrast
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, in other areas, agriculture assigns the highest figure for
water
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 usage. In detail,
San
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Diego
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 accounted for the largest proportion of
water
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 usage for the residential areas (60%),
whereas
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 these figures for
California
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 and
Worldwid
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Worldwide
 are lower at 39% and 8%, respectively.
However
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, the rest of the world saw the highest percentage of using
water
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 for farming, 69%.
By contrast
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, these figures for
California
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 and
San
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Diego
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 County are lower at 28% and 17%, respectively.
In addition
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, the figure for industry in
San
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Diego
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 was equal to that of other parts of the world (23%).
While
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,
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California
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 allocates the highest
water
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 usage for industry rather than
San
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Diego
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 and Worldwide.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, san, diego, california with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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