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The chart below shows the value of one’s country exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015

The chart below shows the value of one’s country exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015
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A nuanced comparative analysis of the proportion of one country's
export
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exports
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 in five various sections in 2015 and 2016 by the presented bar chart
along with
 each section's
persentage
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percentage
 of difference rate is depicted.
Overall
,
ir
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it
 can be clearly seen that all categories exhibited a growth in their statistics in 2016, with Gems and and jewellery being an exception. An in-depth examination of the
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data
regarding the three leading groups reveals that the Petroleum products hovered around 60
billions
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 in both studied years, accounting for a 3%
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 in value which pales in comparison with the
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second
 studied group, engineered goods, that stood at well under 60
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 in 2015 and grew to just above it in 2016, creating 8.5%
increse
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increase
. The third analysed section,
however
, is the only exported product that decreased from an estimated 44 billion,
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settling
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approximate
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 40 billion in 2016 with a unique 5.18% fall
of
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 value. Turning to the
last
 two categories, Agricultural products illustrated the slightest increase that resulted in a positive change of 0.81% in its worth which is in stark contrast to
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textiles
that
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 saw the most significant rise
by
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 almost 6
billions
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that
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demonstrated an eye-catching change in
value
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the value
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 of 15.24%.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • value
  • categories
  • percentage change
  • petroleum products
  • engineered goods
  • gems and jewelry
  • agricultural products
  • textiles
  • increase
  • decrease
  • global market demand
  • production capacity
  • international trade policies
  • performance
  • growth
  • decline
  • strategies
  • trends
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