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There are many ways to find a job: newspaper advertisements, internet job search web sites, and personal recommendations. What do you think is the best way to find a job? Give reasons or examples to support your opinion.

#job #newspaper #advertisements #internet #search #web #sites #recommendations #support
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There is no doubt that these days searching for a suitable
job
 opportunity
could
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can
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 be
quiet
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quite
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 challenging.
Nowdays
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Nowadays
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 there are numerous ways to find jobs,
such
 as
,
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apply
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 newspaper
advertisments
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advertisements
, internet
job
 search
web sites
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websites
show examples
, and my preferred way personal recommendation. If I going to rate the ways
accourding
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according
 to their outputs,
i
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I
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 will put personal recommendation first because many companies do not announce about their
new
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newly
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 opened positions.
In other words
,
bussiness
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business
 owners and companies look first inside
thier
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their
 team members if any one of them
know
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knows
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 a worker will be a good fit for the company.
For example
, more than
the
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apply
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half of newly employed individuals for new roles in the United States of America in 2019 were via networking. Come
second,
manual application, go to
humanresource
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human resource
human-resource
human resources
 department in any
instituation
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institution
,
then
applay
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apply
 with
hard
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a hard
the hard
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 copy of
job
 seeker's
rusme
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resume
ruse
rise
.
Moreover
, prepare for a quick
pich
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pitch
 to catch the attention the interviewers could secure an
oppertunity
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opportunity
 to get a new
job
.
Finally
, with
a
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apply
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new technology, the internet,
applaying
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applying
 for a
job
became
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has become
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more
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apply
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easier and faster ,but not always
results
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result
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 in a good way. In conclusion,
although
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despite
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 the different tools and
technology
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technologies
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 that help
graduate
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graduates
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for
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with
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job
application
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applications
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, I believe that social skills and networking
is
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are
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 the
better
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best
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 and the most effective tools to find a
job
 position.
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argument
The writer offers a distinct preference and provides reasons and examples to support their opinion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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