The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity 2010.
The column chart illustrates the proportion of Australian
men
and
women
in 6 different
age
groups
who did exercise in 2010. It is clearly observed from the chart that, excluding the
age
group
of 15 to 24,
women
were more active than
men
in all other
age
groups
.
To begin
with, the figure for
men
with the
age
group
of 15 to 24 who did physical activity was 52.8% which was higher than that of
women
with the same
age
group
at 47.7% in 2010.
Moreover
, in the
age
group
of 25 to 34, the percentage of females was almost 50% which was higher than males with 42.2%.
In addition
, in the
age
group
of 35 to 44, the figure for
women
was 52.5% which was by far higher than that of
men
with 39.5% which accounts for the lowest proportion of
men
among all
age
groups
.
Subsequently
, the percentage of
women
in the
age
groups
of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 was roughly the same at 53.3% and 53% respectively.
However
, 43.1% of
men
in the
age
group
of 45 to 54 did regular exercise which was lower than the figure for
men
in the
age
group
of 55 to 64 by 2%.
Nonetheless
, the proportion of older
men
and
women
in the
age
group
of 65 and over was slightly different by just 0.4%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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