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There are two views about people's financial conditions. One of them is acceptance of a bad situation like dissatisfaction in their job or lack of money. Another is trying to change bad situations, so improve themselves.
This
essay claims that making useful efforts to change an unfair economic situation is better than having a steady status. The details will be explained in the following paragraphs.
On one hand, a hardworking Linking Words
person
is more successful than a conservative Use synonyms
person
who is afraid of change. A Use synonyms
person
should not create a static lifestyle for themselves, Use synonyms
thus
, they must be dynamic in all aspects of life. A point of aspects is about occupation and money. An important component of working is to make a positive effort to improve their work position, Linking Words
consequently
, increasing self-confidence. The other is earning enough money to, supply their personal needs. Linking Words
For example
, in 2020, it was reported in " Strivers Always Win" that 70 Linking Words
percent
of workers who have the power to take risks are always successful, Change the spelling
per cent
as a result
, they have their desired vocation and income.
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On the other hand
, satisfaction Linking Words
that is
not rational does not make a Linking Words
person
progress. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, it makes a meek life that, the lack is felt everywhere. Linking Words
That is
why, less trying leads people's personality to be passive. Linking Words
For instance
, about 95 Linking Words
percent
of people who do not try for a promotion, will always remain in the same state as they were throughout their lifetime.
In conclusion, Change the spelling
per cent
this
essay reports that changing a constant employment condition is the best choice to progress in life Linking Words
instead
of admission to an undesired position.Linking Words
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