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The bar chart shows percentage of respondents expressing an interest in certain sports.

The bar chart shows percentage of respondents expressing an interest in certain sports.
The bar chart compares six different sports in terms of
respondents
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 interests in 1995, 2000 and 2005.
Overall
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, the most interest was expressed in
football
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 and the least interest was expressed in
golf
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. In 1995, the most
people
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 were interested in
football
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, at over 40%. The figures for swimming and
rugby
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 were quite lower than that, at 22% for swimming and 24% for
rugby
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. The indicators of
snooker
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 and
tennis
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 were slightly similar, at 30% for
snooker
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 and 29% for
tennis
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.
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, the least
people
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 were interested in
golf
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, at about 18%. In 2000, the most interests were expressed in
football
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, at approximately 42%. The figure for swimming was quite lower than that, at over 28%. The indicators of
rugby
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,
snooker
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 and
tennis
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 were relatively similar, at 18% for
rugby
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, over 20% for
snooker
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 and about 24% for
tennis
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. The least interested
people
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 were in
golf
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, at 15%. In 2005, the most
people
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 were interested in
football
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, at 45%. The figure for swimming  was the same as that for
rugby
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, at nearly 27%. The indicators for
snooker
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 and
tennis
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 were lower than those, at 23% for
snooker
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 and 22% for
tennis
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.
Golf
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 experienced the lowest indicator, at about 14%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words football, golf, people, rugby, snooker, tennis with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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