Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal? You should write at least 250 words.

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In today’s society, as the number of developing
countries
increase
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. More
countries
are pushing their economy by producing more materials and goods for international trading. In some people’s eyes, generating goods
are
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the goal every
countries
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country
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strive
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to
do
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achieve
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.
While
the goal does bring some controversy, the upside
do
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outweigh the downside for
a
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developing and developed
countries
.
Firstly
, when setting up the goal of producing materials and goods, developing and developed
countries
can utilize the
resources
the country
have
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and not let it wither away. When pushing for more
products
,
country
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the country
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will need more
resources
.
Therefore
, more
resources
are being used and not
get
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wasted. By using up more
resources
,
countries
can get more funds from international trading, markets,
shipping
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and shipping
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and create more income for the
country
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country's
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developments
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development
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. Another thing to point out, when
countries
need to push
the
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productivity, more manpower
are
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used which
open
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more job opportunities for people. When more people are hired to work, the unemployment rates
decreased
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and the government funds
increased
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from all the new incomes.
Secondly
, trading
products
to other
countries
are
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is
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not the only
things
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thing
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the goal do. By making more
products
and trading them away, both developing and developed
countries
are introduced to new partnerships with other
countries
. When other
countries
are interested in what the other
countries
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countries'
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products
are, relationships can be created between
countries
which
allow
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more
countries
to trade with each other.
From trading
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with other
countries
also
bring
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brings
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benefits to the
countries
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country's
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securities. Most
countries
when
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, when have partnership with each other,
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to have
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have
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partnership
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with each other can create a group of similar
countries
which not only
boost
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the
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country's
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countries
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country's
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economy but
also
its securities. A good example
in
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ASEAN,
make
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by South East Asia
countries
. ASEAN
wanting
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to help its
member
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members
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economically, but to
also
assisting
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in military needs when needed.
Over all
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, by setting up the goal of making
products
and
good
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goods
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.
Countries
get an increase in both
economy
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economic
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and
also
military aspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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