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The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams below delineate the monthly
income
 spent on different household items for both
low
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low-income
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income
 and
high
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high-income
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income
 groups.
Overall
, the two groups spent money differently; the
low
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low-income
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income
 group spent most of their
income
 on food and drink and fuel bills,
while
 the
high
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high-income
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income
 group used their
income
 for miscellaneous. For
low
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low-income
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income
 families, most of the
income
wasted
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is wasted
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 on food and drink
with
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29
percent
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per cent
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 of the
income
, fuel bills place in second with 24
percent
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per cent
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, and miscellaneous with 18
percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
, categories
such
 as transport, clothing, restaurants, and hotels only take over 4 to 9
percent
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per cent
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. When compared to
low
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low-income
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income
 households,
high
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high-income
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income
 households spend money differently with
most
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the most
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 money spent on miscellaneous activities at 23
percent
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per cent
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 and recreation at 21
percent
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per cent
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. Unlike
low
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low-income
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income
 groups,
high
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high-income
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income
 households only spend 15
percent
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per cent
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 of their
income
 on food and drink. The two categories that have the lowest
percent
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percentage
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 are fuel bills
with
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at
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 7
percent
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per cent
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 and clothing
with
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at
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 6
percent
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per cent
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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