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The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of monthly household income spent on various items by two different groups in one European country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams below delineate the monthly
income
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 spent on different household items for both
low
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low-income
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income
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 and
high
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high-income
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income
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 groups.
Overall
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, the two groups spent money differently; the
low
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low-income
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income
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 group spent most of their
income
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 on food and drink and fuel bills,
while
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 the
high
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high-income
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income
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 group used their
income
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 for miscellaneous. For
low
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low-income
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income
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 families, most of the
income
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wasted
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is wasted
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 on food and drink
with
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apply
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29
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
income
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, fuel bills place in second with 24
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percent
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per cent
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, and miscellaneous with 18
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percent
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per cent
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.
Moreover
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, categories
such
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 as transport, clothing, restaurants, and hotels only take over 4 to 9
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percent
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per cent
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. When compared to
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low-income
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income
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 households,
high
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high-income
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income
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 households spend money differently with
most
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the most
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 money spent on miscellaneous activities at 23
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percent
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per cent
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 and recreation at 21
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percent
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per cent
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. Unlike
low
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low-income
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income
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 groups,
high
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high-income
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income
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 households only spend 15
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percent
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per cent
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 of their
income
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 on food and drink. The two categories that have the lowest
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percent
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percentage
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 are fuel bills
with
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at
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 7
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percent
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per cent
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 and clothing
with
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at
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 6
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percent
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per cent
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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