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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph here illustrates the
crime
rate
accross
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across
 different
age
 groups and the pie chart depicts the types of
crime
 committed in the United Kingdom for the
last
year
. To
summerise
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summarise
show examples
, committed
crime
 started from less than the
age
 of 12 and increased with
age
upto
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up to
 28, from
then
 the
crime
rate
 continuously decreased till the
age
 of 60 and almost half of these
crimes
 were violent
crimes
.
Last
year
,
crime
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the crime
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rate
 was zero till the
age
 of 8, after that
age
 people started involving with
crimes
. The
crime
rate
shoot
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upto
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up to
 70% at the
age
 of 12. The involvement continues to rise to 80%
among
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in
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20s
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the 20s
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.
Then
 the trend started to fall, reaching 60% among the
24
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24-year
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year
 group. It dropped to 20% at the
age
 of 28. From here, the
rate
 slowly reduced, reaching below 10% among
60
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the 60-year-old
year
age
 group. The majority
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of crime
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crime
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crimes
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 committed
last
year
was
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were
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 violent
crimes
, at
the
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a
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 staggering number
of
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apply
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46%.
Second
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The second
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 highest was
propert
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property
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, rate, age, year, crimes with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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