The graph shows below the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows below the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented line graphs elucidate information about the development of buying places in one country from 2100 to 2018.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the amount of shopping
place
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places
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that close and new were decreased. In 2011, there were approximately 6.500
marketplace
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marketplaces
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that
cannot
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could not
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maintain their presence.
In
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On
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the other hand,
a
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the
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number of grand opening
shops
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were
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was
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around 8,500. After that,
in
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from
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2012 to 2014
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shops closure
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shop closures
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had fluctuations
whereas
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shops
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shop
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opening
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openings
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rapidly increased and reached a peak
of
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apply
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. The amount of those two figures
were
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was
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nearly
same
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the same
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at roughly 6.000. In 2015, almost every shopping place could continue
their
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its
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activities, even though the improvement was minimal. The development of opening and closing
shops
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in 2016 and 2017
were
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remained steady at 4.000 and 5.000 respectively and
had
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a
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apply
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moderately declined to 3.000 in 2018 for
new
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the new
a new
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building
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buildings
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of shopping and minimally rose to around 5.000 for
closures
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closing
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shops
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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