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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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status
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the status
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 of the
continution
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continuation
 into
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higher education by
awomen
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women
 after school graduation in five countries
in
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 two points
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the
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time - 1980 and 2015.
There
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These
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 five countries could be divided into three main groups - unchanged status, minor changes and major changes. The first
croup
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group
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 consists
Australia
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of Australia
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, with the highest level of continuing
of
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education - almost 60% - in 1980; and
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 stable
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 35 years. The second group encompasses
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France with
lightest
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 change of 5% from 50% in 1980 up to 55% in 2015. In the third group there are three countries with the
highes achievments
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highest achievements
 in
post school
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 high education.
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South Korea,
tha
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starts
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with
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at
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 15% in 1980 and rose
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 percentage up to 30%;
then
 the UK with
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 point of 35% and
increasing
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increased
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 to 55%; and
the
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last
 - the USA with 38% in 1980,
that
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which
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 grew up to 59% in 2015.
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