The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart provides key information about 2009 to 2013 displaying global
sales
of the top five mobile phone brands. The units are measured in millions. Overall
, it is clear from the graph that Samsung
sales
out
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perfrom
all competing companies during the period. Correct your spelling
perform
In addition
, both the
Samsung
and Nokia have seen steady growth over the years, whereas
other startups have seen little change over the period. According to
what is shown, the
Correct article usage
apply
Samsung
and Nokia during the period between 2009 and 2013, there was a significant difference in the sales
rate. While
in 2011 both companies witnessed a steady change in their total sales
ratio. Moreover
, the graph shows that in 2013, Samsung
's phone sales
rose to a legendary level.in
terms of Apple , LG and ZTE,they are considered as startups Capitalize word
In
also
the bar chart shows that LG had the highest sales
in 2009. While
ZTE company has not changed over the past years and has remained constant. Finally
,Apple is considered to have achieved great results over the past years.Submitted by 01_salver_cheek on
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