The maps below show recent changes in town of Kimsvile. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The multiple maps compare the rapid development of Kimsville
city
between 2002 and the present.
Overall
, there has been an introduction to new facilities such
as apartments, a train station, a football stadium, a pub, and a software company building, some of them replaced the old facilities provided in town.
In 2002, a city
centre
was located in the middle of the region. There was a shopping centre
in the north and an old cinema in the south. While
in the eastern part of the city
centre
was a huge factory. Lastly
, in each corner of the town, there were a bunch of trees.
In the current state, the old cinema has been transformed into a pub, and the factory has been rebuilt into a software company building. Furthermore
, the western part of the city
centre
was developed into a new train station. Finally
, the trees, have been cut down into new apartments and football stadiums, especially for the ones located in the northwest and southwest.Submitted by evaagustine11 on
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