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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a specific holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a specific holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
#information #tourists #holiday #resort #australia #summarise #features #comparisons #lea
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 multiple graph
given
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 information about
tourists
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tourists'
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 origin in some countries.
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, there are 3 nations who are Asian,European,American visitors and the other territory. There
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 a difference between
average
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 length of stay,most popular accommodation and the main activity ancestry that gives detail about
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 graph.
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, the highest tourism is in
Europe
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. That’s why in
Europe
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holidaymaker
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holidaymakers
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 try to stay there for 16 days. Meanwhile , the number of guests
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 Asia
were
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 the lowest
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Europe
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 and the USA.
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, in the USA tourism source slightly
decrease
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 than
Europe
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. In conclusion, there are only 2 nations with the majority genesis despite the
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country
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 visitors.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holiday resort
  • demographic data
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • noticeable patterns
  • comparative language
  • correlations
  • trends
  • satisfaction ratings
  • dissect
  • recap
  • significent
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