The chart and table below provide information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
The pie chart depicts the
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
tourists
by region of origin in percentage while
table
shows 3 detailed information Add an article
the table
such
as average
length of stay, most popular accommodation and main activity of Correct article usage
the average
Asian
, Europe, Correct your spelling
Asia
US
and other countries.
Correct article usage
the US
Overall
, tourists
from Europe and US
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the US
much
more rather than Add a missing verb
are much
Asian
and others. Replace the word
Asians
Moreover
, European
and Replace the word
Europeans
tourists
from other regions prefer Camping or Caravan
as Fix the agreement mistake
caravans
an
accommodation whilst visitors Correct article usage
apply
come
from Verb problem
apply
Asian
and Correct your spelling
Asia
American
do sightseeing mostly. The lasting period of staying belongs to Europe Replace the word
America
tourists
among the
all Remove the article
apply
candidats
.
As a looking into more details, the amount of European and US humanity are almost the same (Europe-37%, US-35%). Asians are 10%, Correct your spelling
candidates
while
Others are 18%.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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