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The chart and table below provide information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

The chart and table below provide information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea
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The pie chart depicts the
amount
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number
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 of
tourists
 by region of origin in percentage
while
table
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the table
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 shows 3 detailed information
such
 as
average
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the average
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 length of stay, most popular accommodation and main activity of
Asian
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Asia
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, Europe,
US
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the US
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 and other countries.
Overall
,
tourists
 from Europe and
US
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the US
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much
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are much
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 more rather than
Asian
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Asians
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 and others.
Moreover
,
European
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Europeans
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 and
tourists
 from other regions prefer Camping or
Caravan
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caravans
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 as
an
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apply
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accommodation whilst visitors
come
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from
Asian
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Asia
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 and
American
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America
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 do sightseeing mostly. The lasting period of staying belongs to Europe
tourists
 among
the
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all
candidats
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candidates
. As a looking into more details, the amount of European and US humanity are almost the same (Europe-37%, US-35%). Asians are 10%,
while
 Others are 18%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holiday resort
  • demographic data
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • noticeable patterns
  • comparative language
  • correlations
  • trends
  • satisfaction ratings
  • dissect
  • recap
  • significent
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