The chart and table show information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table show  information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart illustrates the visitors by their species in percentage.
While the
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The
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table below shows the average length of arrival in the country,
preferable
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the preferable
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place
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places
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to live and activities that are mainly done by
seesighters
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sighters
.
Overall
, the most amount of tourists came from Europe, second place is taken by the US. Asians are most likely to sightsee the sights that they visit, meanwhile, travellers from other
territories
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main leisure is surfing.
Firstly
, Eastern trippers spend 7 days at their most well-known accommodation, a 5-star hotel. They hold the
last
place in the list of 4 countries visiting a republic with 10%.
Secondly
, American journeyers spend a fortnight of their vacation. They prefer to stay at 4-star hotels, not as superior as
asians
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Asians
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. 35% is the stat, which American tourists take in visiting
destinanion
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destination
destinations
, being runner-ups.
In addition
, the prime activity that they do
in
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land they travel to is the same as the far-easterns, sightseeing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist demographics
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • fluctuations
  • spending habits
  • preferences
  • external factors
  • economic situations
  • resort developments
  • attractions
  • correlations
  • trend
  • demographic changes
  • flux
  • visitor numbers
  • impact analysis
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