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The maps below show the center of asmall town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the center of asmall town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The maps below show the centre of a small
town
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 called
Islip
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 as it is now, and
plans
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the plans
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 for its development The maps illustrate the current and future plan of the
Islip
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town
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.
Overall
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,
due to
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new
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the new
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 project the
Islip
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town
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center
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centre
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 will
be change
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be changed
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 completely and doubtless, it will be a considerable development of the
town
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. At first
glance
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glance,
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 it can be said that, in the recent situation the
city
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consist
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consists
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 of mainly roads and shops. There are
no
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not
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 enough facilities for activities for the residents. The road is not well-planned.
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, it is only a road which not
relating
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relate
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 to the other parts of the
city
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. No doubt, it takes a lot of time to commute. It poses a problem special for students. In the second
map
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map,
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 the new infrastructure of the township is given. Doubtless, the new architecture will change the capacity and practicality of
Islip
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city
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City
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.
Thus
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, constructions including
bus
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a bus
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 station, shopping centre, car park, new housing and pedestrian cross will make inhabitants’
life
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lives
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 more joyful.
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, dual
carriageway
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carriageways
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 will not only reduce committing time
,
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apply
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 but
also
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 make the urban area more a busy
city
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. New project of the
city
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center
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centre
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thus".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, islip, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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