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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The line graph below illustrates the amount of cargo transfer in
United
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 Kingdom from 1974 to 2002 with four different types of
transport
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.
Overall
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, during
thirty-year
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the thirty-year
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 period, in
UK
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the UK
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 road
transportade
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transport
 type remained the biggest spenders on goods, with all three other convey spending much less on them.
To begin
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 with, road
transport
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initially
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 stood at 70
million
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 tonnes, rising rather steadily until 1992 when it reached about 80
million
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. After a sudden surge in 1998, it continued to rise steadily for another 2 years to reach a high of approximately 100
million
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 in 2000. Moving on to water and rail
transport
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 figures: both were steady at 40
million
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 from 1974 to 1978. Water
transport
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then
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 rose sharply to about 60
million
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 before a notable increase in 1997.
In contrast
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, rail
transport
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 varied widely during the rest of the period, returning to its initial figure by 1997.
Lastly
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, goods transported through pipelines increased gradually from 5
million
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 in 1974 to just over 20
million
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 in 1982, after which the numbers
leveled
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levelled
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 off.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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