Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many people argue that whether we should put a great deal of effort to improve our conditions
,
or accept bad things and situations as they are. Remove the comma
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This
topic is a
intense debate with both Change the article
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supports and critics. Correct your spelling
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This
essay aims to discuss both of the views, but argue in favour to
the first statement.
On the one hand, those people who believe that our Change preposition
of
life
would be much easier if we can
learn to let various things go and be happy with Wrong verb form
could
watever
we have. They Correct your spelling
whatever
also
say that we can not control every aspect of our life
, even if we Fix the agreement mistake
lives
endeavor
to alter things we would get Change the spelling
endeavour
a
burnout which can be caused by a lot of pressure and work. With Correct article usage
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you can not properly enjoy your Add a comma
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life
. For instance
, if we try to reach to
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career
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our career
financial
benefits that Correct article usage
the financial
comes
with it in Change the verb form
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this
competitive job market, we will have to work so hard even non-stop for a
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such
a long length that it will hardly allow to enjoy your youth times and personal live too.
On the other hand
, supporters of improving our situation by trying hard say that our life
consist
of struggling, suffering and battles. Individuals who give their best by doing hard are going the win the race. They keep arguing that people who try to change bad situations take the first step to Change the verb form
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the
success, and become more motivated to second obstacles. Correct article usage
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, well-known
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a well-known
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name
Cristiano Ronaldo and his family lived in poor conditions, Wrong verb form
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therefore
he could not accept it to countinue
their Correct your spelling
continue
life
this
way.
In conclusion, I think that overcoming these types of obsctacles
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are
the key to success and they motivate us to go Change the verb form
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further
by not giving up. By turning sutiation
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