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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar charts compare the number of
incidents
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 and injuries ( per 100 million commuter miles) travelled by different kinds of transportation in 2002.
it is clear that
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 the highest number of
incidents
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 and injuries happened because of the demand response with 225 and 173 respectively ,
while
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 commuter
rail
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 made up the lowest amount for both . in
further
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 detail for
incidents
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, light
rail
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 and
bus
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the bus
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 had
equal
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the equal
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 number at 76.
moreover
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, commuter
rail
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 made up the lowest amount in all 5 categories ,
while
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 demand response accounted for 225 , which is the peak of the bar. moving into injuries , it is obvious that it followed the same patterns as
incidents
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 for the lowest and highest with 17 and 173.
furthermore
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,heavy and light
rail
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 were almost the same by 4 and the bus was the second place with 66.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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