When it comes to workplace, we normally think we have to go there to work. A lot of us commute work every day. However, there are some people who work remotely at their homes or away from their offices. What do you think is the reason why some companies permit their employees to work this way?
Some believe that people should
work
directly in the office but nowadays it becomes
common Wrong verb form
has become
that
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for
the
people can do a job at home. The reason why they can Correct article usage
apply
work
remotely is the increasing of
effectiveness and reducing the cost of transportation.
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apply
To begin
with, it is commonly believed that the more comfortable ones feel, the more productive they are. The head office who allows the employee to work
anywhere will give more pleasure to the worker
because the servant do
not need to prepare a lot. Change the verb form
does
as
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For
an
example, usually, The parents who Correct article usage
apply
work
in such
a company, in the morning they
should cook to their family, iron clothes to their children, so they will in a rush to go to the factory. Correct pronoun usage
apply
This
condition will bring
to Verb problem
cause them
unhappy
and Add a missing verb
be unhappy
unenjoy
to do more Correct your spelling
unenjoyed
project
but, when they can Fix the agreement mistake
projects
work
at home, they do not need to rush.
Secondly
, working directly in office
can bring good results because the leader can supervise Add an article
the office
an office
in
the whole day. Change preposition
apply
However
, allowing worker
to finish Fix the agreement mistake
workers
the
Change the word
their
job
at home will reduce Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
the
transportation Correct article usage
apply
cost
so the manager Fix the agreement mistake
costs
do
not Verb problem
is
require
to spend money to buy fuel Wrong verb form
required
to
the Change preposition
for
worker
and Fix the agreement mistake
workers
this
money can be allocated to other projects. For instance
, those
money can be utilized Correct determiner usage
the
to
Change preposition
by
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the holiday's
holiday's
company team so that the team can reduce their stress and come back with Change noun form
holiday
the
fresh brain.
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a
To sum up
, it can be concluded that there are two reasons why companies can permit their servants. First and foremost is enhancing the productiveness of the worker
and the second is to reduce the company's expenditure.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Clarify who you mean by 'head office' and 'servant' as these terms are uncommon in this context. Consider using 'employer' and 'employee' instead.
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