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The graph below shows the road deaths per 100,000 of population for five countries plus the OECD average from 2001 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the road deaths per 100,000 of population for five countries plus the OECD average from 2001 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of
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 who died in five nations the UK, Australia, the USA, Brazil, India, and the OECD average in the year 2001 to 2015 per 100,000 population person.
Overall
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, Brazil was the most affected country with accident death rates in all years and the United Kingdom was the least,
whereas
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 Australia, the United States of America, and India had accidents but declined in all years and the USA, India, and the UK became stable after one decade. It is conspicuous that, the citizens of Brazil died 18
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 per 100,000 in 2001 , which rose marginally and experienced 19
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 per 100,000 in 2005 and with an increment and touched 22
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 per 100,000 in 2015.In the case of Bharat, the population met with accidents and deaths was 16
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 per 100,000 in 2001, which experienced no change until 2015.
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, the United States of America had deaths of about 14
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 per 100,000 in 2001 with a constant till 2005 and same in 2001,
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, it plummeted to 12
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 per 100,000 in 2010 and remained constant until 2015. Probing ahead, in the case of the OECD death toll was 12
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 per 100,000 in 2001, which was weak and reached 6
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 per 100,000 in 2015.
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, Australia had a gentle decrease starting from 8
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 per 100,000 in 2001 and ending at 6
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 per 100,000 in 2015. The
last
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 nation was the United Kingdom, the death rate was 6
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 per 100,000 in 2001 and it displays a slight fluctuation and was unchanged from 2010 to 2015 ,4
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 per 100,000.

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