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in some countries, the cost livig rapidly increasing. what do you think may be the reasons for this? what effects might this have on society?

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Living costs in some countries are swiftly rising
this
 is because the
nation
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national
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 rate is high.
As a result
, the
peoples
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people's
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 buying
power
 is weakened.
This
 essay will discuss how it has become the main reason and how it affects society's purchasing
power
. Increased prices of goods and services are driven by
inflation
. there are various
reason
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reasons
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 why
inflation
 happens
such
 as an unmanageable increase in the money supply. Indonesian 1998 is an example of a
country
 where the living cost at that time rose greatly
due to
inflation
. The nation was unstable, which created an economic crisis.
Consequently
, primary, secondary, and even tertiary needs prices were unaffordable for some
people
. A
remarks
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remark
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 and notable effect of
inflation
 is the purchasing
power
 of the
people
 is weakened. Still in Indonesia in 1998, low to middle-class economy
people
can
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could
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 not afford basic food needs
such
 as eggs, potatoes and rice
due to
 their prices in the market. The station was forcing the seller to put an unreasonable price
due to
 stabilizing the economy and political situation at that period of time.
Therefore
, only several groups of
people
 could afford to buy the things they need
as a consequence
if
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of
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inflation
 or in other terms, it has lessened their purchasing
power
. Another
country
 that had an experience with
this
 issue was Venezuela in 2022 with approximately three hundred per cent of
inflation
 rate. In conclusion, maintaining the supply of money in a
country
 is crucial and indisputable;
otherwise
, a
country
 will face the following problems
such
 as an economic crisis which affects the society's purchasing
power
.
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Great use of specific examples to support your arguments (e.g., Indonesia in 1998 and Venezuela in 2022).
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