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ou work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ●explain how this problem is affecting your work ●say what you want the shop or company to do

#ou #work #home #piece #equipment #job #shop #company #●explain #●say
Dear sir. I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing to request a rapier of my laptop I recently bought from your shop. I am smith, i
work
 in star company as a transport manager. right now I
work
 from home.
Last
 month I bought a Samsung laptop from your shop.
however
, all of
suddenly
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 key
bord
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board
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 not working properly. What I mean
when
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is when
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 I was typing some letters were missing.and
noice
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noise
 came from key
bord
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board
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 when I was typing. As I mention I
work
 from home. Because of
that
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 I am unable to submit my important documents to the customers and office authorization.
such
 as payment confirmation, and daily reports. It may lead to my
work
 performance. Because of that,
i
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 request that you resolve
this
 issue as soon as possible. When I called your branch assistant she informed me it's not possible quickly. without your reference.I sent it to your branch with attach
this
 letter. I hope you are kindly attention
this
 matter and give a quick solution. Smith. Your faithfully.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single, clear idea to maintain coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Double-check for grammatical errors and proper capitalization to improve readability and professionalism.
Task Achievement
Adopt a more formal and polite tone, especially in business correspondence.
Task Achievement
You have addressed all the points in the prompt, providing a detailed explanation of the problem, its impact on your work, and your request for resolution.
Coherence and Cohesion
You’ve successfully included a greeting and a closing in your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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