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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
given
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bar chart illustrates the sector
contributions
 to
India
's gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000,
it is clear that
 agriculture
contributions
 dropped dramatically from one decade to another.
According to
 the bar chart,
Services
contributions
of
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India
's Gross Domestic Product have developed and increased gradually,
In addition
,
services
 in the years
of
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1990 and 2000
has
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 the highest percentage of
contributions
than
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 all other sectors.
Secondly
, Industry's contribution
on
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 GDP improved but
in
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 a low rate from 1960 to 1980 and had a constant rate in the following decades.
To conclude
,
India
's GDP nowadays rely heavily on
services
 which could affect negatively in the long term,
for instance
, if
an
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economic sanctions were forced on
India
services
will
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 have no value.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words contributions, india, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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