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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 bar graph illustrates the breakdown of various annual
income
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 groups (in percentages) belonging to
cities
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 and regional
centres
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 of Australia.
Overall
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, the most common
income
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 category in
cities
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 is the
middle
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class
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whereas
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 in the regional
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centres
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centres,
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 it is the lower
middle
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class
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. In general, people living in the city earn more than those who live in regional
centres
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. With regard to
cities
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, 35% of the population
belong
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 to the
middle
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class
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 ($70,000 to $120,000)
income
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 bracket.
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, the lower
middle
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class
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 ($40,000 to $70,000) accounts for 30% of the population. In regional
centres
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, a reverse trend is observed with around 34% belonging to the lower
middle
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class
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 and just over 25% in the
middle
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class
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. Low incomes ($40,000 or less) are less common in the
cities
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 in comparison to the regional
centres
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 at around 13% and 22% respectively. Interestingly, the difference between the given areas in the
high
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high-income
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income
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 bracket ($120,000 or more) is only 5% more in the city when compared to regional
centres
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 at 15% of the population.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, cities, centres, middle, class with synonyms.
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