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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what exyent do you agree or disagree?

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Several
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thousands
thousand
 of
languages
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 exist in our world nowadays.
The most
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people
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 speak major
languages
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 namely Chinese, English, French, Hindi, Russian, German,
Arabian
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and Arabian
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,
nonetheless
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, some
people
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 speak minor
ones
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.
The most
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languages
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derived
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are derived
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 from
the
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ancient times,
some
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and some
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ones
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apply
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are a result of mixing several other
languages
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, some
ones
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was
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 created in
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modern time. But in our time cultural communications between different nations have grown, open borders
allows
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allow
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 individuals to travel and relocate and
also
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 Internet creates
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 unified information space. In these
conditions
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conditions,
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 some
languages
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 die out. We will discuss
this
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 process,
consider
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and consider
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 positive and negative points.
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 with positive arguments.
The mankind
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Mankind
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 has reached an information era
hence
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 as a rule
people
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 live in the global information world.
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Furthermore
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continues
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. The official negotiations require a knowledge of major
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language
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languages
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 like English,
on the contrary
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 knowledge of minor
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 is useless, because almost nobody
understand
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understands
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 these
ones
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. If there are fewer
languages
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 in the world,
then
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persons
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people
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 from different countries
will
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would
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 understand
simplier
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simpler
 each other
.
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more.
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Moreover
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,
absence
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the absence
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 of
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language
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a language
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 barrier will help
out
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individuals better
to
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understand each other
hence
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 cultural exchange will increase
therefore
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people
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 will treat better each other.
Nevertheless
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,
the
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a
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 negative argument
exist
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exists
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. We can lose
a
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the
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 culture of small nations,
for example
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, we
know
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do know
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 not all about
the
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ancient literacy. Many small nations have their own literature, music, and painting.
Along with
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 native speakers will end up the experts of culture. It are
costs
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cost
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 of
language
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 consolidation of mankind. We will consider some elaborate
languages
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 as
complexible
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complex
cipher
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ciphers
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.
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,
American
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the American
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 Army used Native Americans for encryption. It can induce a scientific interest. In conclusion, I will agree with the first position. I believe that all useful knowledge from any minor
language
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have
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has
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 already
translated
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been translated
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to
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into
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 major
languages
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 but the time spent
for
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apply
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learning
major
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a major
the major
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 non-native
language
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 is very sorry.

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task achievement
Ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the question. You have discussed both perspectives, but your argument for agreeing with the statement needs further development with clear and comprehensive ideas.
task achievement
Work on providing more relevant and specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs and ideas. Using transitional phrases and connecting sentences can help make your essay more coherent.
coherence cohesion
The introduction is generally clear, but the conclusion could be more developed and provide a stronger summary of your main points.
task achievement
Be more specific in some of your explanations. For example, when discussing the value of small cultures, mention specific cultures or examples to illustrate your point.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, which provide a structure to your argument.
task achievement
You have addressed both positive and negative aspects of the topic, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical flow and your main points are generally well-supported, even if they could use more specific examples.

Your opinion

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