Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what exyent do you agree or disagree?

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thousands
thousand
of
languages
exist in our world nowadays.
The most
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people
speak major
languages
namely Chinese, English, French, Hindi, Russian, German,
Arabian
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and Arabian
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,
nonetheless
, some
people
speak minor
ones
.
The most
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languages
derived
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from
the
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ancient times,
some
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and some
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ones
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apply
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are a result of mixing several other
languages
, some
ones
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created in
the
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modern time. But in our time cultural communications between different nations have grown, open borders
allows
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allow
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individuals to travel and relocate and
also
Internet creates
an
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unified information space. In these
conditions
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conditions,
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some
languages
die out. We will discuss
this
process,
consider
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and consider
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positive and negative points.
To begin
with positive arguments.
The mankind
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has reached an information era
hence
as a rule
people
live in the global information world.
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Furthermore
the process of globalization
continue
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continues
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. The official negotiations require a knowledge of major
language
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languages
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like English,
on the contrary
knowledge of minor
languages
is useless, because almost nobody
understand
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these
ones
. If there are fewer
languages
in the world,
then
persons
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people
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from different countries
will
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would
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understand
simplier
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simpler
each other
.
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more.
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Moreover
,
absence
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the absence
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of
language
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a language
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barrier will help
out
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apply
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individuals better
to
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understand each other
hence
cultural exchange will increase
therefore
people
will treat better each other.
Nevertheless
,
the
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negative argument
exist
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exists
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. We can lose
a
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culture of small nations,
for example
, we
know
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do know
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not all about
the
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ancient literacy. Many small nations have their own literature, music, and painting.
Along with
native speakers will end up the experts of culture. It are
costs
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cost
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of
language
consolidation of mankind. We will consider some elaborate
languages
as
complexible
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complex
cipher
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ciphers
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.
For instance
,
American
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the American
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Army used Native Americans for encryption. It can induce a scientific interest. In conclusion, I will agree with the first position. I believe that all useful knowledge from any minor
language
have
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already
translated
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been translated
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to
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into
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major
languages
but the time spent
for
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learning
major
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a major
the major
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non-native
language
is very sorry.
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