Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what exyent do you agree or disagree?
Several
thousants
of Correct your spelling
thousands
thousand
languages
exist in our world nowadays. The most
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Most
people
speak major languages
namely Chinese, English, French, Hindi, Russian, German, Arabian
, Correct word choice
and Arabian
nonetheless
, some people
speak minor ones
. The most
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Most
languages
derived
from Add a missing verb
are derived
the
ancient times, Correct article usage
apply
some
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and some
ones
are a result of mixing several other Correct pronoun usage
apply
languages
, some ones
was
created in Change the verb form
were
the
modern time. But in our time cultural communications between different nations have grown, open borders Correct article usage
apply
allows
individuals to travel and relocate and Correct subject-verb agreement
allow
also
Internet creates an
unified information space. In these Change the article
a
conditions
some Add a comma
conditions,
languages
die out. We will discuss this
process, consider
positive and negative points.
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and consider
To begin
with positive arguments. The mankind
has reached an information era Correct article usage
Mankind
hence
as a rule people
live in the global information world. Futhermore
the process of globalization Correct your spelling
Furthermore
continue
. The official negotiations require a knowledge of major Change the verb form
continues
language
like English, Fix the agreement mistake
languages
on the contrary
knowledge of minor languages
is useless, because almost nobody understand
these Change the verb form
understands
ones
. If there are fewer languages
in the world, then
persons
from different countries Replace the word
people
will
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would
simplier
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simpler
.
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more.
Moreover
, absence
of Correct article usage
the absence
language
barrier will help Correct article usage
a language
out
individuals better Change preposition
apply
to
understand each other Verb problem
apply
hence
cultural exchange will increase therefore
people
will treat better each other.
Nevertheless
, the
negative argument Correct article usage
a
exist
. We can lose Change the verb form
exists
a
culture of small nations, Correct article usage
the
for example
, we know
not all about Add a missing verb
do know
the
ancient literacy. Many small nations have their own literature, music, and painting. Correct article usage
apply
Along with
native speakers will end up the experts of culture. It are costs
of Fix the agreement mistake
cost
language
consolidation of mankind. We will consider some elaborate languages
as complexible
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complex
cipher
. Fix the agreement mistake
ciphers
For instance
, American
Army used Native Americans for encryption. It can induce a scientific interest.
In conclusion, I will agree with the first position. I believe that all useful knowledge from any minor Correct article usage
the American
language
have
already Change the verb form
has
translated
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been translated
to
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into
languages
but the time spent for
learning Change preposition
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major
non-native Add an article
a major
the major
language
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