The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Observing
to
two maps which were separated Change preposition
apply
timeline
2007 and 2010 , Fix the agreement mistake
timelines
it
gave us some Correct pronoun usage
apply
informations
Change the wording
information
pieces of information
how
we could approach Change preposition
on how
to
the Remove the preposition
apply
city
hospital Use synonyms
by
many overland route
In 2007 the Change preposition
through
infrastructure
of the hospital space was quite fundamental , first and foremost ,the Use synonyms
city
hospital was located in the Use synonyms
center
and surrounded by a ring Change the spelling
centre
road
, Use synonyms
Linking Words
furthermore
the ring Add a comma
furthermore,
road
was Use synonyms
also
associated with a car park on the east of Linking Words
a
Hospital Correct article usage
the
road
which included hospital employees and residents. Use synonyms
In addition
, the Linking Words
city
hospital Use synonyms
also
had Linking Words
bus
Use synonyms
infrastructure
which Use synonyms
were
positioned on three Change the verb form
was
bus
stops on each side of the hospital Use synonyms
road
.
Use synonyms
Move
to 2010 we could realize the innovation of the hospital Wrong verb form
Moving
infrastructure
Use synonyms
for instance
Linking Words
bus
Use synonyms
infrastructure
, intersection development and parking facility. Use synonyms
Initially
,the Linking Words
bus
tops still stayed at Use synonyms
same
location but it was displaced by Add an article
the same
an
advent of Remove the article
apply
Use synonyms
bus
station Add an article
the bus
as well as
the car park extent from one to two distinctively which once was for hospital members located at the same address and the other for citizens Linking Words
Unnecessary verb
apply
was
placed on the east of Verb problem
apply
city
hospital.Use synonyms
Additionally
, the traffic route was Linking Words
changing
when it developed and expanded more Wrong verb form
changed
route
by adding more two Fix the agreement mistake
routes
roundabout
in place on the peak and the bottom of the hospital Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
road
.
Use synonyms
Overall
,in both Linking Words
year
it had Fix the agreement mistake
years
an
significant advance when the Change the article
a
City
hospital Use synonyms
infrastructure
was upgrading their systematic traffic though some headquarters Use synonyms
still
in one place Add a missing verb
were still
such
as the Linking Words
city
hospital , the ring Use synonyms
road
and the Use synonyms
city
Use synonyms
road
Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, infrastructure, road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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