The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Observing
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two maps which were separated
timeline
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2007 and 2010 ,
it
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gave us some
informations
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how
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we could approach
to
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the
city
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hospital
by
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many overland route In 2007 the
infrastructure
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of the hospital space was quite fundamental , first and foremost ,the
city
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hospital was located in the
center
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and surrounded by a ring
road
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,
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furthermore
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the ring
road
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was
also
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associated with a car park on the east of
a
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Hospital
road
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which included hospital employees and residents.
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, the
city
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hospital
also
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had
bus
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infrastructure
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which
were
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positioned on three
bus
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stops on each side of the hospital
road
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.
Move
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to 2010 we could realize the innovation of the hospital
infrastructure
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for instance
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bus
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infrastructure
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, intersection development and parking facility.
Initially
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,the
bus
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tops still stayed at
same
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location but it was displaced by
an
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advent of
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bus
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station
as well as
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the car park extent from one to two distinctively which once was for hospital members located at the same address and the other for citizens
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was
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placed on the east of
city
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hospital.
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, the traffic route was
changing
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when it developed and expanded more
route
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routes
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by adding more two
roundabout
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in place on the peak and the bottom of the hospital
road
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.
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,in both
year
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it had
an
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significant advance when the
City
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hospital
infrastructure
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was upgrading their systematic traffic though some headquarters
still
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in one place
such
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as the
city
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hospital , the ring
road
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and the
city
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road
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, infrastructure, road, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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