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in the future all cars , busws and trucks will be driverless. the only people travelling inside these will be passengers. do you think the advantages of driverless cars outweigh the disadvantages?

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As we all know there is a rapid boom in technology and everything is being digitalized . In a couple of years, we might experience vehicles without drivers which means
driverless
cars
, buses , trucks and so on .
This
 invention in fact will bring drastic change in the future, in the upcoming paragraphs we will discuss
about
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the pros and cons of
driverless
cars
. First of all,
driverless
cars
 would be very
much
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helpful for the elderly people , for those who can't drive independently . With the help of
driverless
cars
, they can travel to places they want and they can head to hospitals without someone's help. Apart from that
driverless
cars
 will save up more time.
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 travels like the ones above 500 km , it is impossible for a human to drive without taking a rest ,
whereas
driverless
 vehicles can make it.
For example
 , a goods truck with loads of apples travels from Kashmir to Mumbai which is around 2000 km . If it is driven by a human , it would approximately take a week and
also
 accidents might take place since it is a heavy vehicle . In fact, if it is
driverless
 it might be very easy .
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 a drawback ,If there is a benefit
then
 there should be a demerit too. Since it is a technology and it runs on software , there is a huge risk of it being hacked or being malfunctioned . Accidents might
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 because of small bugs. A few months back in the state of California , a
driverless
 car fell off a bridge because of some technical error in it. In these ways, it might be risky and dangerous to travel in it. In conclusion , if
driverless
 technology comes into the market it would be very
much
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useful . There are many more benefits
such
 as road safety and all , hope we can eliminate the software glitches and it won't be an issue.
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The essay provides a complete response to the prompt, addressing both the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles.
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The introduction and conclusion are well-structured and provide a good overview and wrap-up of the main points.

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