The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the graph provided highlights the figure for three different materials’ average value changes recorded monthly in 2014.
Overall
, there was a dramatic drop in the nickel’s
price
, turning it from the top to the bottom in the first half of the year. Noticeably, in the second half of the year, all three metals have shared a similar pattern of
price changing
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proportion, shortening the
price
gap between each other by the end of the given time period. To probe more deeply, the
price
change of nickel was the highest in January, which was 6
percentage
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higher than December’s;
however
, it had dropped 5
percentage
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just during two months. Despite there
was
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a
slightly
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level between March and May, it
then
significantly dropped sharply, reaching minus 3
percentage
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by June.
In contrast
, copper
also
witnessed a more stable
price
decrease during the first six months, the
price
never fell over 1
percentage
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.
Furthermore
, what should be particularly mentioned is that the
price
tendency of zinc was the most stable one among all,
however
, it had a gradual
price
change
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February.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
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