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The chart desplays the percentage of people using internet, and the pie chart shows the avarage of spending on shooping on the internet in different countries

The chart desplays the percentage of people using internet, and the pie chart shows the avarage of spending on shooping on the internet in different countries
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The given bar and pie graphs illustrate the
internet
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 usage and average spending on online shopping in five categories, namely Germany, Sweden, France,
Spain
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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. Units were measured in
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the forms
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forms
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form
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 of percentages and euros.
Overall
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, what stands out the most from the graph is that Sweden had the highest
amount
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 of using
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the internet
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internet
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while
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Spain
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 had the least
amout
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amount
 of
using
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use
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. The most significant difference was found in the average
spendings
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spending
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 on online shopping between
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Spain
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. In terms of comparison of
internet
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 usage among different countries, Sweden ranked first at
exact
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 35 per cent, followed by
UK
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, Germany, and France, having 20, 15, and 10 per cent. The most marginal percentage was made in
Spain
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 at
exact
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 5 per cent. With regards to average spending on online shopping, all nations showed
the
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a
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 similar trend of correlation between increased
amount
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 of using
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internet
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the internet
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 and increased
amount
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 of
spendings
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spending
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 except
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UK
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the UK
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. The
amount
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 of using
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internet
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the internet
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 from
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UK
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the UK
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 was second highest,
however
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, the
UK
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spend
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spent
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 the highest
amount
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 on online shopping at 87 euros per person
in
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on
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 average.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, spain, uk, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Internet usage
  • Online shopping
  • Spending
  • Average
  • Comparison
  • Trends
  • Correlation
  • Insights
  • Countries
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