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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The present two maps illustrate the development of Nelson
City
Use synonyms
 from 2000 to today. It is obvious, that the
city
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 has evolved since 2000, so the facilities have been increasing so much;
furthermore
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, the
city
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 is longer than past.
According to
Linking Words
 the picture of 2000,
this
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city
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 had less equipment.
In addition
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, the main reason that people went to the
city
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 was the university which did not have a dormitory.
Also
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, people could go to the
city
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 by car or train because the
city
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 had an old train station, but the
city
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 in the past had a vegetation area.
However
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, currently, the
city
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 has a really good alternative
due to
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 the fact near the University is built hall of residence, and it is forbidden to use cars in the
city
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 centre;
As a result
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, you must rent a bike or walk;
moreover
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, now Nelson has different types of markets which are shopping centre, new shop
instead
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 of the old shop and covered;
furthermore
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, they build a new place or eating in the port zone that have restaurants, bars, and clubs.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential
  • commercial
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • urbanization
  • de-urbanization
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • industrial
  • transformation
  • recent times
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • key features
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