The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The present two maps illustrate the development of Nelson
City
from 2000 to today. It is obvious, that the
city
has evolved since 2000, so the facilities have been increasing so much;
furthermore
, the
city
is longer than past.
According to
the picture of 2000,
this
city
had less equipment.
In addition
, the main reason that people went to the
city
was the university which did not have a dormitory.
Also
, people could go to the
city
by car or train because the
city
had an old train station, but the
city
in the past had a vegetation area.
However
, currently, the
city
has a really good alternative
due to
the fact near the University is built hall of residence, and it is forbidden to use cars in the
city
centre;
As a result
, you must rent a bike or walk;
moreover
, now Nelson has different types of markets which are shopping centre, new shop
instead
of the old shop and covered;
furthermore
, they build a new place or eating in the port zone that have restaurants, bars, and clubs.
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