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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing sof skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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skills is more important.
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university
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skills is more important . When humans have
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 clearly that
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that these ideas are linked together smoothly. Use more transition words and phrases to connect your thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the introduction clearly outlines what the essay will discuss. In the conclusion, summarize the key points discussed and restate your opinion in a clear and concise manner.
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To achieve better task response, address both points of view more thoroughly and provide more specific examples to support each argument. Make your position clear in the introduction and conclusion.
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Work on presenting clear and comprehensive ideas. Avoid repetitive phrases and ensure that each sentence adds value to your argument.
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Use specific and relevant examples to support your points better. This makes your argument more convincing and shows a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
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You have made an effort to address both points of view in the essay.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and a conclusion, which are essential elements of the essay structure.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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