Many people do not care enough about environmental issues? do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays most of the
nations’
citizens Correct your spelling
nation’s
have
not concerned about the environmental impacts. I strongly agree with Verb problem
are
this
statement by giving the below mentioned
specific points,
Add a hyphen
below-mentioned
Firstly
, due to
the revolution of industrialization, transportation and factories are
developed tremendously. Verb problem
have
Hence
, the air and water start to pollute. Moreover
, all country people
haven’t
interested Verb problem
aren’t
about
Change preposition
in
this
issues
. Fix the agreement mistake
issue
Secondly
, people
have lot
of pressure which Correct article usage
a lot
are
associated with their families and work burden. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
Hence
, most of them do not have enough time to intervene the
commodity issues. Change preposition
in the
Additionally
, most of
Change preposition
apply
the
individuals are very keen to migrate Correct article usage
apply
in
urban areas, so Change preposition
to
traffic
crisis is increasing and it has polluted the air but Correct article usage
the traffic
people
don’t
Verb problem
are not
concern
about that Replace the word
concerned
also
they disavow to use
public transport. To illustrate, in my country most Verb problem
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
are purchasing two wheelers
and cars, Add a hyphen
two-wheelers
thus
traffic
problem has increased and the air is polluting drastically. It has resulted the climate change abnormally and the Correct article usage
the traffic
summer time
heat has appeared more than normal level.
Correct your spelling
summertime
Furthermore
, each country
development Change noun form
country's
has
completely Unnecessary verb
apply
depend
on Correct subject-verb agreement
depends
their
citizens. Correct pronoun usage
its
Hence
, they should cooperate with their government orders. Whereas
, people
should change their attitude also
don’t behave as a selfish mind. All men and women must come out from their life circle and look at their surroundings. Whilst, government and their pollution control department should be aware, they don’t allow factories to pile the Correct word choice
and also
wastages
in dwelling areas.
Replace the word
waste
To conclude
, people
and government
Correct article usage
the government
have
not enough awareness about environmental problems at present times. Add a missing verb
do have
This
is not a
fair and it will ruin the Change the article
apply
people
health and lifetime. Change noun form
people's
Hence
, both of them should cooperate and eradicate the environmental problems and save the entire universe.Submitted by smsundaram57 on
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coherence cohesion
Consider structuring paragraphs more logically. Each paragraph should ideally focus on one main idea. For instance, separate the discussion about industrialization from issues such as traffic congestion.
task achievement
There are instances of awkward language use and grammatical errors. For example, 'air and water start to pollute' should be 'air and water started getting polluted.' Spend some time reviewing grammar rules and practicing sentence construction.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which aids in guiding the reader through the argument.
task achievement
Relevant examples, such as the increase in purchasing two-wheelers and cars in your country, help to substantiate your points.