A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world? Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh it is drawbacks?
Many countries and places in the world rely on
tourism
as a mainly
source of revenue. Change the adverb
main
Nevertheless
, tourism
can also
be a source of issues if it's not well control
. There are Change the verb form
it's not well controlled
it's not well controlling
a
good and outweigh sides Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
to
tourism
in the modern world. For instance
, a lot of tourists
visit to
our country Remove the preposition
apply
for
spot ancient buildings or Change preposition
to
relaxing
in our country. Wrong verb form
relax
This
reasons
can be one example.
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reason
Firstly
, environmental problems mean, many
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that many
tourists
visiting attractive places are more likely to come with tons of unidentifiable matters like viruses and environmental issues. For instance
, we don't know what will happen when it comes from a virus, so, we have to worry about infectious disease
. Because Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
anomynous
Correct your spelling
anonymous
tourists
with infectious diseases are more likely to attack native people quitly
, it could have side effects.
Correct your spelling
quietly
Secondly
, there is cultural trouble, which means most tourists
from different countries have their own cultural identification. Sometimes, this
can generate many misunderstandings. If it assumed that native people are much more likely not to speak English, I'm standing each other would be a waste of time. Along with
this
problem, sometimes racial issues would arise. Almost all tourists
are western
people so Capitalize word
Western
unique
and invaluable culture of their native region would Correct article usage
the unique
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
possible
Replace the word
possibly
to
disappear with their visit.
In conclusion, in my opinion, Fix the infinitive
apply
tourism
is a
main source of income for Correct article usage
the
tourists
, but we have to take these aspects, into consideration. Individuals who want to travel should try to respect native cultures and personal hygienece
.Correct your spelling
hygiene
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task achievement
Ensure that you proofread your essay to correct grammatical and vocabulary errors, such as "mainly source" instead of "main source" and "well control" instead of "well-managed."
task achievement
Strengthen your argument by providing more specific and relevant examples. For instance, you could mention how specific countries benefit economically from tourism or discuss particular cultural misunderstandings.
coherence cohesion
Better organize your essay with clear paragraphs for each main point. This will improve readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Develop your ideas more fully. Each argument should be explored in depth to provide a thorough response.
task achievement
The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of tourism, showing an understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The writer has attempted to structure the essay with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
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