You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
There is no doubt that these days many species of
animals
face extinction
, and the rest are close to being extinct soon.
There are several reasons behind this
phenomenon. Firstly
, environmental pollution is one of the main reasons for some species
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extinction
. Especially, sea pollution where chemical liquid leak
from factories or ships that transport oil and other chemical contents in oceans.In consequence, a huge number of sea creatures have Fix the agreement mistake
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due to
contamination. Secondly
, the wight bear is facing threats because of climate change in areas with freezing temperatures turning to be warmer. In other words
, a lot of animals
used to live in cold weather will be harmed if they move to a warm weather area. Finally
, the most important reason that we can control to stop the vast death of animals
is random hunting by humans. One clear example is that in the past pandas were the most hunted species in the world, and that led to near
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the near
a near
extinction
of the pandas.
Until,
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Moreover
, China has built several reservations that provide a safe environment and medical care to help the pandas to
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Furthermore
, animal rights activists are considered as knowledge sources to educate other people about animal rights.
In conclusion, animals
will continue to face vast death problem
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Add more specific examples to support your main points. This will make your argument more convincing and show a deeper understanding of the topic.
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Improve the clarity and comprehensiveness of the ideas presented. Consider elaborating on each reason and possible solution to provide a thorough response.
coherence cohesion
Work on the introduction to more clearly outline the main points that will be discussed in the essay. This will help guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas. This will improve the logical flow of the essay, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
task achievement
The essay addresses the main points related to the causes of animal extinction and suggests potential solutions.
coherence cohesion
Both the introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured, with each paragraph addressing a specific reason for animal extinction or a potential solution. This helps to maintain clarity.
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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