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IELTS Task 1 Process: The process of pu-erh raw tea and ripe Tea

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The Diagram illustrates all the steps by which pu’erh raw and ripened
tea
 are produced.
Overall
, there are three different stages phases in
this
 proceeding, beginning with initial inactivation and drying, followed by either
aging
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 or fermentation and
finally
 storage in the case of the raw
tea
 and compression for the ripe
tea
. The technique
both
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 varieties of
tea
 commences when the leaves are fried in pans in order
deactivate
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 the enzymes,
this
 is followed by rolling of the fired leaves and drying in the sun. If the next stage is reached, the two kinds of
tea
 will be treated in different ways." For the ripe
tea
, the loose raw
tea
 is fermented with
mold
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 and
then
 compressed to form the final product. In terms of the raw
tea
, the leaves are first compressed. If the subsequent step is carried out, the
tea
 will be aged rather than fermented, and the pu’erh raw
tea
 will
then
 be available for use.
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task achievement
While the task response covers most of the steps in the process, it could benefit from including more specific details to fully explain each stage. Additionally, maintaining clarity in the statement stages can help in understanding.
coherence cohesion
The essay demonstrates a logical progression but could improve by more explicitly linking the steps and avoiding redundancy. Use of transition words like 'then,' 'subsequently,' and 'finally' can aid in this.
task achievement
The introduction clearly outlines the main stages of the process, setting up a clear expectation for the reader.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured with a clear distinction between the processes for pu-erh raw tea and ripe tea.

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