The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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A line

graphs

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graph

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indicates the difference in terms of ownership of washing

machine

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machines

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refrigerator

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refrigerators

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and vacuum cleaner ownership in a country between the years 1920 and 2019.

Whereas

other

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the other

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graph illustrates the hours of duty per house per week in the same time interval. All three electrical devices had followed an uprising trend over

this

century. Which,

resulted

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resulted in

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a decrease in the time spent

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house chores. Even though

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refrigerator ownership was almost none in 1920, it became

must-buy

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a must-buy

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product with

also

vacuum cleaner by 2000.

While

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washing

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the washing

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machine

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

ownership
electrical appliances
housework
time frame
variables
trends
significant milestones
turning points
correlation
reduction
influenced
societal implications
quality of life
gender roles
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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Many countries are experiencing population growth, and need to build more homes. Some say that new homes should constructed in existing cities while others argues that new towns should be built to accommodate the growing population. What are the advantages and disadvantages of these point of view

Some people believe that no one should be allowed to continue working after the age of 65. However, others say there shouldn’t be a limitation on age, and anyone should be allowed to work regardless of their age. Discuss both views, give your opinion and include relevant examples.

Describe a time when you were extremely happy. What happened?

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful. At persuading used to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.