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The graph below shows the percentage ofhouseholds with different kinds of technology in theU.S.from 1995 to 1999.Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the percentage ofhouseholds with different kinds of technology in theU.S.from 1995 to 1999.Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.
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The given line chart illustrates the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S from 1995 to 1999,
It is clear that
 DVD players were the lowest type of technology owned by a household in 1999 with approximately 40 % of households. First of all, washing machines
is
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were
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 the most popular technological device in all five years and witnessed a 20% increase between 1995 and 1999,
In addition
, the percentage of computers in houses
have
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 jumped significantly as shown in the line chart.
Furthermore
, computers were
second
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the second
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 most common electronics in households until 1998,
Nonetheless
, suddenly in the middle of 1998 the rate of phones took over second place.
Which
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This
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 means in 1999
computer
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computers
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 we
third
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the third
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 common device. In conclusion, DVD players were the least technology owned in a household,
Whereas
 washing machines were the most common.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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