The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The most effective method to improve the roadside safety of
vehicle
drivers
is to sit for a driving exam every year. While
there is some truth
belief, I would agree with Replace the word
true
this
statement.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why highways are safer. The main argument that
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is that
drivers
must do a full inspection. To explain, the transportation agency should control, especially the health and driving of commercial vehicle
drivers
. For instance
, currently, different accidents are significantly increasing. First of all, a vehicle
can be broken, secondly
, driver
can have a health problem, and Add an article
the driver
a driver
thirdly
, driver
can sleep Add an article
the driver
a driver
while
driving without rest. As a result
, thousands of accidents happen with vehicles every year in the world, and how many people
are damaged and killed. Therefore
, considering all the advantages above, I would say a full inspection (driver and vehicle
) could be the best way.
On the other hand
, I would say that it is not a good idea for drivers
to pass the test every year. The main causes, some
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of some
people
are stress
and anxiety. For example
, the pressure of having to pass a test annually might cause undue stress
and anxiety for drivers
, potentially leading to poorer performance and even discouraging some people
from driving altogether. For example
, the pressure of passing the annual test can cause undue stress
and anxiety for drivers
, potentially leading to poor performance and even stopping some people
from driving altogether. Hence
, there would be a reduction in drivers
. It can even impact economics.
In conclusion, annual driving exams could improve road safety through regular checks, but the stress
and logistical challenges make it impractical. A balanced approach with targeted interventions and stricter law enforcement would likely be more effective.Submitted by [email protected] on
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task achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the prompt. While you mentioned 'there is some truth belief,' it is unclear and could confuse readers. Try to be more direct in your stance.
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Although your points are valid, try to include more specific and relevant examples to strengthen your arguments. Using real-life statistics or case studies can make your essay more convincing.
coherence cohesion
The essay could be better structured with clear topic sentences and transitions between paragraphs. You should also avoid repeating similar points, like mention about stress and anxiety twice in a row.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid redundant phrases and words, such as 'the pressure of passing the annual test can cause undue stress and anxiety for drivers, potentially leading to poor performance and even stopping some people from driving altogether,' which could be simplified.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points made in the essay and offers a balanced perspective, which is excellent practice for IELTS essays.
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You provided multiple reasons to support your arguments, which indicates a thorough understanding of the topic.