The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two tables describe the statistics of foreign and US
employees
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birth
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in the United States which are measured in millions and
catagorized
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categorised
by gender
last
year. In the first table, it was shown that there were significantly fewer
workers
of foreign
birth
in the US compared to the
number
of employees who were born in the US. The total
number
of
workers
of foreign
birth
was 24,357
workers
;
while
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the figure of
workers
of US
birth
was 129,533
workers
. The highest
number
of workforce
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foreign and domestic
birth
by age was different, with most of the
foreign
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foreign-birth
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birth
citizens at 35-44 years old;
whereas
,
US
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US-birth
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birth
workers
were mostly at the age of 25-34 years old.
Furthermore
, the
number
of employed and unemployed
workers
of both foreign and native
birth
had significant differences. There were
lesser
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amount of people who were hired for foreign
birth
compared to US
birth
with a total of 21,969
workers
;
while
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the total amount of employed US-born citizens was 117,095 people.
Moreover
, the
number
of unemployed
workers
had the same trend with 2,388 unemployed foreign
birth
workers
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and 12,438 US
birth
workers
.
To conclude
, there was a significant gap in numbers between the
workers
of native and foreign
birth
in the US, as there were notably more numbers of US
birth
workers
compared to foreign
birth
workers
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, workers, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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