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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two tables describe the statistics of foreign and US
employees
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employee's
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birth
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births
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 in the United States which are measured in millions and
catagorized
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categorised
 by gender
last
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 year. In the first table, it was shown that there were significantly fewer
workers
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 of foreign
birth
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 in the US compared to the
number
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 of employees who were born in the US. The total
number
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 of
workers
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 of foreign
birth
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 was 24,357
workers
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;
while
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,
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 the figure of
workers
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 of US
birth
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 was 129,533
workers
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. The highest
number
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 of workforce
from
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of
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 foreign and domestic
birth
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 by age was different, with most of the
foreign
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foreign-birth
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birth
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 citizens at 35-44 years old;
whereas
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,
US
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US-birth
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birth
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workers
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 were mostly at the age of 25-34 years old.
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, the
number
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 of employed and unemployed
workers
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 of both foreign and native
birth
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 had significant differences. There were
lesser
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 amount of people who were hired for foreign
birth
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 compared to US
birth
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 with a total of 21,969
workers
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;
while
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 the total amount of employed US-born citizens was 117,095 people.
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, the
number
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 of unemployed
workers
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 had the same trend with 2,388 unemployed foreign
birth
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workers
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 and 12,438 US
birth
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workers
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.
To conclude
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, there was a significant gap in numbers between the
workers
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 of native and foreign
birth
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 in the US, as there were notably more numbers of US
birth
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workers
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 compared to foreign
birth
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workers
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, workers, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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