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The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030. The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030.

The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030. The graph below gives information from 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projection until 2030.
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The line chart illustrates a report about the consumption of energy fuel in the United
State
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 of America from 1980 to 2030 with a projection.
Overall
,
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the graph shows the petrol and oil
in addition
 the coal increased during the same period,
while
 the natural gas and nuclear, solar/wind
in addition
 hydropower were approximately stable in the same period. From 1980 to 2030 provide information about three options which are nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower nearly the same
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a
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steady percentage,
However
,
next
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the next
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 option is natural gas an upward trend opposite
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Correct word choice
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coal grew from almost 16 to nearly 27 per cent. The
last
 option which is petrol and oil
is
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fluctuated until
reaches
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1995
then
 touched the highest point in the year 2030.
Finally
, studies
provides
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the
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that
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 petrol and oil
is
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are
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higher
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at higher
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point
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points
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 than
another
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other
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category of
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all
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, but the
lower
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lowest
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 point
it
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is natural gas a steady.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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