The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts describe information about how much expenditure was spent by European people on 6 different commodities and services between 1958 and 2008. The most significant facts to emerge from these graphs are that Housing and Luxury goods expenditures showed an upward trend
while
the number expenses of Clothing and Travel/transport experienced a downward trend. Looking at the details, the Housing, Food and Luxury expenditures
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the same a rising number
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10%. Which, those figures stood at 22% to 32%, 8% to 17% and 7% to 17% respectively in 2008.
On the other hand
, the percentage of Clothing dominated expenses in the first period that spent at 32% but
this
figure dropped almost three times to 12% in 2008 and
similar
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trend
also
was experienced by Travel/transport expenditures which had 13% in 1958. After that, it fell dramatically to 6% in 2000.
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Entertainment spending had a small minority around 18% to 16% in 2000.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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