The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The diagram illustrates the data of the sketched places of two schools in the city of Canterbury. In overview, there
is
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two different areas
which
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apply
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plotted to build a college,
this
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first one is in
rural
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a rural
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area and the other one will be in
CBD
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the CBD
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.
To begin
with, school number one will be located
at
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the east side of Canterbury town and Sturry is highly populated with approximately 7000 people.
Furthermore
, the second school is in Town Centre with less congestion,
thus
, it's about five
killometres
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kilometres
travel from the Central Business District to the Sturry community area,
however
, to
Chartham
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Chartham,
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it's about 7
killometres
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kilometres
drive,
hence
,
this
society
consist
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of 4 500 humans.
Moreover
,
university
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is
on
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the North of Canterbury, whilst,
countryside
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the countryside
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occupied
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all over
the
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both sides ground.To add on,
Town
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the Town
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Centre is
also
sorrounded
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surrounded
with
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the
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buildings and
lastly
,
main
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road connects the area of Chartham and Sturry at the same time.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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