The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The diagram illustrates the data of the sketched places of two schools in the city of Canterbury.
In overview, there
is
two different areas Change the verb form
are
which
plotted to build a college, Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
first one is in Correct determiner usage
the
rural
area and the other one will be in Add an article
a rural
the rural
CBD
.
Correct article usage
the CBD
To begin
with, school number one will be located at
the east side of Canterbury town and Sturry is highly populated with approximately 7000 people. Change preposition
on
Furthermore
, the second school is in Town Centre with less congestion, thus
, it's about five killometres
travel from the Central Business District to the Sturry community area, Correct your spelling
kilometres
however
, to Chartham
it's about 7 Add a comma
Chartham,
killometres
drive, Correct your spelling
kilometres
hence
, this
society consist
of 4 500 humans.
Change the verb form
consists
Moreover
, university
is Add an article
the university
on
the North of Canterbury, whilst, Change preposition
in
countryside
Correct article usage
the countryside
occupied
all over Add a missing verb
is occupied
the
both sides ground.To add on, Remove the article
apply
Town
Centre is Correct article usage
the Town
also
sorrounded
Correct your spelling
surrounded
with
Change preposition
by
the
buildings and Correct article usage
apply
lastly
, main
road connects the area of Chartham and Sturry at the same time.Change the article
the main
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