The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

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The diagram illustrates the data of the sketched places of two schools in the city of Canterbury. In overview, there

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two different areas

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plotted to build a college,

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first one is in

rural

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a rural

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area and the other one will be in

CBD

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with, school number one will be located

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the east side of Canterbury town and Sturry is highly populated with approximately 7000 people.

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, the second school is in Town Centre with less congestion,

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, it's about five

killometres

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kilometres

travel from the Central Business District to the Sturry community area,

however

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Chartham

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Chartham,

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it's about 7

killometres

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drive,

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this

society

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of 4 500 humans.

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university

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the North of Canterbury, whilst,

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occupied

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all over

the

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both sides ground.To add on,

Town

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Centre is

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sorrounded

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the

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buildings and

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main

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road connects the area of Chartham and Sturry at the same time.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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