We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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in
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with
problem
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problems
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this
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apply
people
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belive
that we must think about our nation's Correct your spelling
believe
people
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problem
and solve them.Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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our citizens and Linking Words
people
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but
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apply
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with
this
opinion.
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equal
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clothes
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to
people
in our town. Use synonyms
Secondly
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jenerous
to our kids by helping Correct your spelling
generous
people
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be
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being
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.By way of an example, participate in Correct your spelling
grown
voluntree
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volunteer
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and
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situation
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situations
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apply
under
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apply
we
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ourselves
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Therefore
I try to contribute to national charity as much as I can.
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are aware
of
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from
condition
in other countries Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
particularly
African nations suffer from curable Add the comma(s)
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and die just for not having money as much as Correct your spelling
diseases
few
dollars to survive.Regarding Correct article usage
a few
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of saving one child from falling or Correct your spelling
mind
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another's
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to save
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we must Linking Words
puting
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putting
effectivness
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effective
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the same
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other
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others
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in our lives.
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on
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budgets
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times more
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ones
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ones
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believe
belive
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believe
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should
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a helping
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people
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apply
at
first as they are more Change preposition
apply
dsirable
to get help.Correct your spelling
desirable
durable
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To enhance your logical structure, ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and use linking words to connect your arguments smoothly.
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Work on developing your ideas more fully. For example, explain why helping people in other countries can also benefit your own community.
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