The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year
The bar chart depicts the number of
men
and
women
in various types of occupations in Australia in the previous year.
Overall
, males dominated in all criteria of the workforce except in the clerical and professional sectors where females are seen to be predominant. Notably, the clerical division was mainly occupied by
women
,
whereas
the tradesperson hired the most
men
. Focusing on the
men
-centred jobs, in positions
such
as tradespeople, production and managers
men
 had a significant discrepancy in comparison to
women
, they were three to five times higher than their opposite gender accounting for approximately 9000,000, 600,000 and 550,000 respectively.
However
, other professions like semi-professionals and labourers had a marginal difference of nearly 110,000, with a total of about 510,000 and 400,000
men
in chronological order. Regarding
women
,
although
they were the most employed in the professional and clerical departments, the recruitment gap
in contrast
to their male counterparts was close. The graph indicates roughly 980,000 female and 880,000 male clerks,
while
Professionals comprised 700,000
women
and around 650,000
men
.
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