Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by a very small number of people. People say that govt should spend public money on saving these languages. Discuss both views and give ur opinion.

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There are a lot of endangered and
extincted
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extinct
languages, thousands of them, all over the world. Some people think that governments have to contribute budget money to retain
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languages
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. In
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I'll
tray
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try
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to understand what
a
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politics really
have
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to do with
such
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problem.
Firstly
, without any doubt, language is an
essencial
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essential
part
of
history
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of
this
language talking
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people. It
depict
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us
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the development of their culture.
Moreover
, I can say that it's an integral
part
of
humanity
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development. So, when we are
loosing
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a tongue - we are
loosing
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the whole nation,
the
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part
of our general history. In
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russian
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there is the
awesm
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awesome
newest
proverb "The man that
have
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forgotten his roots, can't grow the new one". We can understand from
this
proverb that our roots are our power. Now
then
, from
this
point of view, it looks like we need to make every effort
for saving
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extinct
language
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languages
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.
On the other hand
, there are a lot of other problems,
espesially
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especially
on
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the
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developing countries, which they
have
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not
anough
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enough
funds to solve like
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starvation, a wear health system,
a
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lack of basic education.
Thereafter
, they have to choose from the past and the future of their population. It's
obviosly
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obvious
, what
have
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be
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a
choise
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choice
in
such
a case. It's clear that
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such
occasion
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there
are
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the
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only one choice - to
develope
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develop
the future of the nation and to
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about the past. In conclusion, I want to express my opinion. We have to save our past for
better
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understanding of our future. So, when
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developed countries are donating to developing countries,
part
of the funds has to be for
this
aim.
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language
Pay close attention to spelling and grammar. Errors such as 'extincted,' 'essencial,' 'tray,' 'awesm,' 'depict us,' 'tongue,' 'it's obviosly,' and 'have be a choise' affect readability and clarity.
content
Expand on your main points with specific examples. For instance, discuss a specific endangered language and efforts to save it, or a particular country facing the dilemma of language preservation vs. immediate needs.
structure
Structure your essay more clearly by ensuring a smooth logical flow between paragraphs. Use transitional phrases like 'On the other hand,' 'Moreover,' and 'In conclusion,' but ensure each paragraph builds effectively on the previous one.
structure
Your introduction and conclusion effectively frame the essay's discussion.
content
You make valid points on both sides of the argument, showing a balanced understanding of the issue.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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