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The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The table and charts below give informations on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The table and charts below illustrate information
one
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 area in
Bratain
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Britain
 which has on the police budget from 2017 to 2018. The table
explain
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 where was money
come
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 from and
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the chart
diplaced
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explains
 how it was distributed.
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, it can be seen those source National
Goverment
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government
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highest
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of
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Police Budget from 2017 to 2018.
Meanhile
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Meanwhile
, the lowest was Others Resources (eg grants).
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,
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the Pie
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 chart
was
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 Salaries
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of officer
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officer
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 and staff were
biggest
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.
On the other hand
, Technology, Building and transport were the lowest. Look at
details
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, starting National Goverment was the bigger figure at 175. 5m in 2017
compeared
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 to in 2018 at 177.8m followed by local taxes at 91.2m in 2017
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 with 2018 it was bigger at 102.3m. The lowest figure was Others Resources (eg grants) in 2017 at 38 and 2018 at 318.6
m
. Regarding the data, how it money spends that of Salary officer was the highest figure at 75 per
cent
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2018 at 69 per
cent
. Following with Building and Transport were at 17 per
cent
 in
in
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2017 and 2018. The lowest data was technology which was at 8 per
cent
 in 2017 but it more bigger in 2018 at 15 per
cent
.
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