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The chart below shows residential water use in the UK.

The chart below shows residential water use in the UK.
The two pie charts compare the proportion of
water
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 allocated to various household amenities in the UK between the years 1998 and 2008.
Overall
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,
water
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 used for gardening and laundry decreased,
while
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 the kitchen and bathroom saw an increase. Notably, pools were added to the list in 2008, and the proportion of
water
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 for car washing remained unchanged. Focusing on the chores with a downward trend, in 1998, laundry accounted for a quarter of the total
water
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 consumption but fell by 7% ten years later.
Similarly
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, gardening decreased significantly from a fifth to 7% in 2008.
Conversely
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, as for other tasks, the kitchen, which
initially
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 comprised 15% of
water
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 allocation, and the bathroom 22%, grew by 5% and 6% respectively in the end. Interestingly, pools were introduced in 2008, accounting for 9% of the total. Car washing remained the same for both periods, registering at double the rate of pools.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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