You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house.

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Dear Joseph, I hope

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are doing well. I

write

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this

letter to you after a long time, because

last

two months, I had numerous

personel

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personnel

personal

issue

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hence

can't

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able to contact you. Now, I feel

delight

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to inform you about my new

resident

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, which was shifted recently

along with

my family.

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this

house

has

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situated near the city shopping mall and it

facilitate

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a seperate

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seperate

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separate

parking area and two bedrooms with

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hall and

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seperate

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separate

terrace for each bedroom.

Besides

, the landlord for

this

house

has charged affordable rent and

not

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required to

paid

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any amount

for

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advance.

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this

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location a lot of families are living and most of them behave very

good

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and

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character. During the

intial

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initial

times

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my family

has

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encountered some

issue

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this

house

such

as frequent power

failure

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and improper water supply that period neighbors, who

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staying near my

house

were helped more. Eventually. I personally request you to come and visit my

house

along with

your family during the weekends. Best Regards John. Edward.

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grammar

Try to pay attention to small grammatical errors and typos, such as 'your are' instead of 'you are', and 'personel' instead of 'personal'.

coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to improve coherence. For instance, discussions about the house and neighbourhood could be better separated.

structure

The letter structure includes a clear greeting and closing, which is very good.

tone

The tone of the writing is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.

completeness

All parts of the task have been addressed: describing the house, the neighbourhood, and the invitation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

174 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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