You have recently moved into a new house. You want to tell your friend about your good news. Write to your friend. In the letter: • Describe the house. • Describe the neighbourhood. • Invite your friend to come and see the house.

Dear Joseph, I hope
your
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are doing well. I
write
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am writing
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this
letter to you after a long time, because
last
two months, I had numerous
personel
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personnel
personal
issue
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issues
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,
hence
can't
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I haven't
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able to contact you. Now, I feel
delight
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to inform you about my new
resident
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, which was shifted recently
along with
my family.
Moreover
,
this
house
has
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is
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situated near the city shopping mall and it
facilitate
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a seperate
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seperate
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separate
parking area and two bedrooms with
large
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a large
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hall and
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a seperate
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seperate
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separate
terrace for each bedroom.
Besides
, the landlord for
this
house
has charged affordable rent and
not
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required to
paid
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pay
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any amount
for
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in
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advance.
Furthermore
,
this
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location a lot of families are living and most of them behave very
good
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well
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and
genuine
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have genuine
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character. During the
intial
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initial
times
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times,
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my family
has
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apply
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encountered some
issue
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issues
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in
this
house
such
as frequent power
failure
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failures
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and improper water supply that period neighbors, who
are
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were
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staying near my
house
were helped more. Eventually. I personally request you to come and visit my
house
along with
your family during the weekends. Best Regards John. Edward.
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grammar
Try to pay attention to small grammatical errors and typos, such as 'your are' instead of 'you are', and 'personel' instead of 'personal'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea to improve coherence. For instance, discussions about the house and neighbourhood could be better separated.
structure
The letter structure includes a clear greeting and closing, which is very good.
tone
The tone of the writing is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
completeness
All parts of the task have been addressed: describing the house, the neighbourhood, and the invitation.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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